Swedish Union Conducts a Classic Copy Test: “Who We Are” Prose vs. “What You Get” Bullet Points
WhichTestWon's Analysis: (Click back to see versions A & B)
Bullet points with strong “you” oriented copy convinced 16% more visitors to apply for membership!
In translation, the winning bulleted copy read:
3 strong reasons to become a member.
As a member, you get, among other things:
* Income insurance that guarantees you 80% of your salary
* Career coaching, salary and development talks
* Advice, legal and negotiation help
Become a member
In translation, the “about us” prose read:
Unionen makes work life enjoyable.
With nearly half a million members, we are the largest union for the private sector. Unionen is widely represented, from large multinational corporations to small family-owned businesses. Our vision is to create job security, success and satisfaction. Do you want to join?
No matter what country or language your site is in, this type of test can give you a high ROI. However, as Lars learned, the winner is *not* predictable. His team ran a different prose vs. bullets test on another page of Unionen.se – that time the prose won!